casa13
Detroit Elves
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Post by casa13 on Feb 1, 2010 16:31:56 GMT 5.5
my back yards got dirt hole for hoes like yourselves, smoke bowls and doobies, till my fuckn face melts my heads spaced in shelves an put away neatly like her fuckn body after she tried to beat me, i lie cause im deceiving drunk drivin before i tie a hoe down an leave em till there stomach eats themselves causin internal bleedin, that aint period pain your hung up on my rusty chain your so fuckn unconcious your missin crucial parts of your brain except the vein that induces pain leaving incisions in divions precision hacking then fridge em, squirming and turnin till frost bite sticks to there flesh wounds burning, theyll be dead soon there learning, run with an full clip it weights me down u can tell, spray the AK at a nuns face till theres no more bullets on the belt
yes its pretty evil i know, let me know what you think
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Post by amogh on Feb 2, 2010 18:02:05 GMT 5.5
You gotta work on rhyming it was cool for a beginner Check it out just freestyling not directed towards anyone Feels like my minds on the rage unleashing the cage spitting rhymes in blaze cleaning the maze firing rhymes like bullets smoke them up like cigarettes call me a vet you can't catch me i am faster than a jet Fuck a murder cause how can whack's kill you can't write dope even if ya pen's ill hit you for a home run in crowd section only time you'd be selected in team when they are talking about cheerleadin selection
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casa13
Detroit Elves
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Post by casa13 on Feb 2, 2010 18:44:00 GMT 5.5
this aint directed to anyone either
yo, you need to check son my style is iller than ever sicker than bedridden patience that feeling under the weather whether or not your getting beheaded an dumped as forgot smell of your corpse be infested fed by maggets as it starts to rot i'm ill with it so my rhymes are skill fitted and are sealed with a sueing kit knitted mo wicked than a spiked bat as a choice of wepon to fight back puttin holes in your head fuckin up your nike hat, behind the mic i'm like that an to your face i'm even worse been crazy as a baby inflicting pain like a curse ever since my mothers water burst
improvement?
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casa13
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Post by casa13 on Feb 7, 2010 17:57:29 GMT 5.5
yo you jus flatlined my raps have that effect i'm out to get mine get in my way ill put your life in debt kno your right from left and stay steppin out my direction keep dreaming for tupacs ressurection your lucky to be mentioned in raps amature selection, counting all bets against get your head bumped from undergrounds funk have u roughed, shot in the face and stuffed in a trunk dummped in a lake till you sunk and erased and cant be retraced for months
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Post by Aditya on Feb 7, 2010 23:28:23 GMT 5.5
Hey , I suck at freestlyes , but I really really liked some of your lines man...effin crazy
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casa13
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Post by casa13 on Feb 8, 2010 5:33:43 GMT 5.5
thanks man, just give it ago who cares if your shit at it..
Itll be good if some other people dropped some lines too
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casa13
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Post by casa13 on Feb 10, 2010 17:56:23 GMT 5.5
halloween time for a new rhyme to lyrically commit crime these streets are gritty this grime has made it a pitty its fine i get my buzz from killing like dexter i swear i get the same feeling when drilling in, the unwilling is fulfilling i get evil an dark they say i need to change i lethally spark hit you in the cheek from long-range your bed sheets stained an look like u need a new brain too dispose of the body neatly to confuse the boys in blue i choose the toys i use to suit my daily needs scoped rifle with a knife would be nice in helping me exceed these night get colder, this image of me the beholder of this gun in its holster trench coat over my shoulders was created as a kid when i was being molded blindfolded from the world till my rhymes unfolded on these girls in bed choking them with a rope, tied soaked in meth light my cigarette throw it on the redhead till her ashes cover my bedspread
what you think?
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casa13
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Post by casa13 on Feb 11, 2010 18:00:51 GMT 5.5
never thought thoughts could end this wicked bended and twisted sadistic and sickning grinning, unrealistic killing the materilistic bitches that winge over shit, im over it emotionless spokesmen for this problem somebody gota stop them
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casa13
Detroit Elves
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Post by casa13 on Feb 11, 2010 18:16:00 GMT 5.5
never thought thoughts could end this wicked torn apart from the start built to be this MC that slays the rest on each track of his CD thats soon to be released to the streets to watch the others drop below me all gonna wanna know me cause my flow will be free of strings nothing attached, not like you i dont care what they tell me i act worse if they react burst out with words curse out obsurd verbs doing words who ever heard of an MC as ill as me talking shit backin it up with an M16 you say u a man u cant even stand though, after i pull out a machete the size of rambos
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Post by amogh on Feb 12, 2010 15:15:59 GMT 5.5
@casa 13
you'r not even rhyming well rhyming is the basic thing in rap and also you gotta use metaphors too
If you wanna improve you must battle /make punches bring some humor
Like this punch
Your lines can't be attractive even if ya write on a kamasutra pose
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casa13
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Post by casa13 on Feb 12, 2010 17:40:19 GMT 5.5
if i was to write it aiming at someone there would be punchlines
i dont know what u mean about not rhyming? iv been using double syllable or triple syllble rhymes.
i understand what u mean though with the humor but maybe that could be a style tha im not? thanks for the advice tho
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Post by amogh on Feb 13, 2010 10:38:05 GMT 5.5
hey casa let's have a rap battle here what say?
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casa13
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Post by casa13 on Feb 13, 2010 18:08:44 GMT 5.5
ok cool u go first
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mrb
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Post by mrb on Feb 15, 2010 8:46:15 GMT 5.5
Hi, I just joined and I couldn't sleep and was very bored so I did this, I know it isn't good but it was just for fun...
[glow=red,2,300]I already died once, this life is my second time around I never made it past the gates of heaven, and I was banished from the underground My life is is not eternal, the pain and torture I leave behind is Been raping virgin souls, since I was forced to live Excessive bleeding, unsightly sights, children screamin Just a taster of things to come, you want to try me? Just say the word Since birth, I've lived a life of curse, and I still wouldn't change it for the world Is there anythin better to beleive in? These sick sadistic thoughts are what keep me breathin' I need to devoir innocent victims, Just to keep my heart beatin' They try to lock me up but, Who's to say whats wrong and right? Strict instructions from Lucifer himself, mean it's your turn to die tonight Bring all the weapons you can find, but it's my will and hunger to inflict this pain, That always wins the fight,
It all seems so unrealistic Tell you it's just a dream, Just to prolong your plight Thriving off chilling screams, All is not ok tonight, this world is not as it seems.[/glow]
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mrb
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Post by mrb on Feb 15, 2010 8:56:23 GMT 5.5
How do I get stars under my name? I want them!:@
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