Quick rap

[casa13]

my back yards got dirt hole for hoes like yourselves, smoke bowls and doobies, till my fuckn face melts
my heads spaced in shelves an put away neatly like her fuckn body after she tried to beat me,
i lie cause im deceiving drunk drivin before i tie a hoe down an leave em till there stomach eats themselves causin internal bleedin, that aint period pain your hung up on my rusty chain
your so fuckn unconcious your missin crucial parts of your brain except the vein that induces pain
leaving incisions in divions precision hacking then fridge em, squirming and turnin
till frost bite sticks to there flesh wounds burning, theyll be dead soon there learning,
run with an full clip it weights me down u can tell, spray the AK at a nuns face till theres no more bullets on the belt


yes its pretty evil i know, let me know what you think

[amogh]

You gotta work on rhyming it was cool for a beginner

Check it out

just freestyling not directed towards anyone

Feels like my minds on the rage unleashing the cage
spitting rhymes in blaze cleaning the maze
firing rhymes like bullets smoke them up like cigarettes
call me a vet you can't catch me i am faster than a jet
Fuck a murder cause how can whack's kill
you can't write dope even if ya pen's ill
hit you for a home run in crowd section
only time you'd be selected in team when they are talking about cheerleadin selection

[casa13]

this aint directed to anyone either

yo, you need to check son my style is iller than ever
sicker than bedridden patience that feeling under the weather
whether or not your getting beheaded an dumped as forgot
smell of your corpse be infested fed by maggets as it starts to rot
i'm ill with it so my rhymes are skill fitted and are sealed with a sueing kit knitted
mo wicked than a spiked bat as a choice of wepon to fight back
puttin holes in your head fuckin up your nike hat,
behind the mic i'm like that an to your face i'm even worse
been crazy as a baby inflicting pain like a curse ever since my mothers water burst

improvement?

[casa13]

yo you jus flatlined my raps have that effect
i'm out to get mine get in my way ill put your life in debt
kno your right from left and stay steppin out my direction
keep dreaming for tupacs ressurection your lucky to be
mentioned in raps amature selection, counting all bets against
get your head bumped from undergrounds funk
have u roughed, shot in the face and stuffed in a trunk
dummped in a lake till you sunk and erased
and cant be retraced for months

[Aditya]

Hey , I suck at freestlyes , but I really really liked some of your lines man...effin crazy

[casa13]

thanks man, just give it ago who cares if your shit at it..

Itll be good if some other people dropped some lines too

[casa13]

halloween time for a new rhyme
to lyrically commit crime
these streets are gritty this grime
has made it a pitty
its fine i get my buzz from killing
like dexter i swear i get the same feeling
when drilling in, the unwilling is fulfilling
i get evil an dark they say i need to change
i lethally spark hit you in the cheek from long-range
your bed sheets stained an look like u need a new brain too
dispose of the body neatly to confuse the boys in blue
i choose the toys i use to suit my daily needs
scoped rifle with a knife would be nice in helping me exceed
these night get colder, this image of me the beholder of this gun in its holster
trench coat over my shoulders was created as a kid when i was being molded
blindfolded from the world till my rhymes unfolded on these girls in bed
choking them with a rope, tied soaked in meth light my cigarette throw it
on the redhead till her ashes cover my bedspread

what you think?

[casa13]

never thought thoughts could end this wicked
bended and twisted sadistic and sickning
grinning, unrealistic killing the materilistic
bitches that winge over shit, im over it
emotionless spokesmen for this problem
somebody gota stop them

[casa13]

never thought thoughts could end this wicked
torn apart from the start built to be this MC
that slays the rest on each track of his CD
thats soon to be released to the streets
to watch the others drop below me
all gonna wanna know me
cause my flow will be free of strings
nothing attached, not like you
i dont care what they tell me
i act worse if they react
burst out with words
curse out obsurd verbs
doing words who ever heard
of an MC as ill as me talking shit
backin it up with an M16 you say u a man
u cant even stand though, after i pull out
a machete the size of rambos

[amogh]

@casa 13

you'r not even rhyming well rhyming is the basic thing in rap and also you gotta use metaphors too

If you wanna improve you must battle /make punches bring some humor

Like this punch

Your lines can't be attractive even if ya write on a kamasutra pose

[casa13]

if i was to write it aiming at someone there would be punchlines

i dont know what u mean about not rhyming? iv been using double syllable or triple syllble rhymes.

i understand what u mean though with the humor but maybe that could be a style tha im not?
thanks for the advice tho

[amogh]

hey casa let's have a rap battle here what say?

[casa13]

ok cool u go first

[mrb]

Hi, I just joined and I couldn't sleep and was very bored so I did this, I know it isn't good but it was just for fun...


[glow=red,2,300]I already died once, this life is my second time around
I never made it past the gates of heaven, and I was banished from the underground
My life is is not eternal, the pain and torture I leave behind is
Been raping virgin souls, since I was forced to live
Excessive bleeding, unsightly sights, children screamin
Just a taster of things to come, you want to try me? Just say the word
Since birth, I've lived a life of curse, and I still wouldn't change it for the world
Is there anythin better to beleive in? These sick sadistic thoughts are what keep me breathin'
I need to devoir innocent victims, Just to keep my heart beatin'
They try to lock me up but, Who's to say whats wrong and right?
Strict instructions from Lucifer himself, mean it's your turn to die tonight
Bring all the weapons you can find, but it's my will and hunger to inflict this pain,
That always wins the fight,

It all seems so unrealistic
Tell you it's just a dream,
Just to prolong your plight
Thriving off chilling screams,
All is not ok tonight, this world is not as it seems.[/glow]

[mrb]

How do I get stars under my name? I want them!:@